Oh I get what she’s getting at, worth also noting that it’s so myopic it starts with a clear personal grievance. I don’t think “entry-level jobs in their 30s” is even a top-50 goal for feminists wrt gender equity in the work place. The balcony thing is hamfisted too.

The problem is she wants this stilted style, a bunch of commas; maybe a semi-colon to make sure a list is split up in a way that lets you easily discern items. When if you really wanted to lean into the ladder vibe and write in a weird way it’s clearly a spot for line breaks:

I dream of new structures:

a world in which women have entry-level jobs in their 30s;
alternate avenues for promotion;
corporate ladders with balconies on which they can stand still, have a smoke, take a break, make a baby, enjoy themselves,
before they keep climbing.